pixel_0: ([SPN] Sun coming down by the car)
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Title: Window Side
Rating: G
Category: Gen oneshot
Word Count: 1411
Characters: OC, Dean and Sam (Outsider’s point of view)
Spoilers: S2: “Born Under a Bad Sign”
Summary: He always comes on a Sunday because it’s the holy day of the week.
Author’s Notes: Thanks to [profile] equinox_blue for the usual treatment, which always means so much. Thank you also to [personal profile] mellaithwen for reading it over and assuring me that, yes, she did know what I was trying to say. Any remaining mistakes are mine alone. Crossposted around.
Disclaimer: The following characters and situations are used without permission of the creators, owners, and further affiliates of the television show, Supernatural, to whom they rightly belong. I claim only what is mine, and I make no money off what is theirs.

 
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He ordered the same thing every time he came. One regular black coffee with an extra cup on the side. Then, he went and sat by the window, watched the parking lot with eyes distant and avoiding the rest of the world. If his usual place was taken, he never complained. Just found another, but always the window, always the parking lot. That much about his seat remained the same.
 
She had been there for one year, three months and an odd number of days that she refused to count, and out of all her regular customers, he was one of her favorites. Probably the favorite if she would ever decide to admit it to herself. But he was definitely better than the elderly couple who always found something wrong with their food even though they ordered the same thing day after day. Better, too, than the mom and her two squirming brats who threw food, crayons, and dirty napkins on the floor. Better even than the cute jock and his football friends who came in after Friday night games and winked at her when she delivered their food. No, he, one regular black coffee with an extra cup, never said much, but he tipped well and cleaned off his table after he was done.
 
It was always Sunday that he came, and she felt like she practically knew him when really, she knew nothing more than how he liked his coffee and that he drove some kind of old car that still looked pretty good. Her coworkers knew that he was her favorite, that he was her customer. The minute he walked through the door with the little silver bell, she was ready to greet him. Every waitress had her customers. He was one of hers on that unseen claims list.
 
One day, she gathered enough courage to try conversation. Maybe because he had looked at her nametag and called her by name when she poured his first cup of coffee for the only time she could remember. Maybe because it had been a slow day and boredom led to such daring things. Maybe because the Friday football jock had asked her if she would want to see a movie and even though she refused, she was still filled with flirtatious vibes.
 
She wasn’t sure the reason, but she approached his table anyway. “Can I get you a refill?” she asked, holding the coffee pot up. She knew her ponytail was sagging and her hair frizzy, and her make-up was probably melted right on off by then, but she gave him her friendliest smile anyway. Real, of course, not just the fake one that she kept for the other hundred customers she saw during her shift.
 
He looked up, away from the parking lot. “Oh, no thanks, sweetheart,” he told her with a small and appreciative but sad smile of his own. It was the first time she had ever really looked at him like that. Normally, he stared at the table when he came in and mumbled his order to his feet. Never before had he looked at her face on. He appeared tired, she noticed, old with exhaustion and stress, but he was definitely not bad looking. If he were a bit younger and she a bit ballsier, she would have considered asking him out.
 
“If you don’t mind me asking,” she said because she had been wondering for quite some time now, and she figured she had nothing to lose, “who is the extra cup for?”
 
“Oh,” he responded, reached out to touch it, being reminded of its presence. He withdrew his hand and played with a silver ring on his finger instead. “My brother.”
 
“Is he okay?” she found herself asking before she could stop. Of course his brother wasn’t okay. If he were, he would have been there too.
 
“To be honest, I really don’t know. I haven’t seen him in a long time. Years, I guess.” He looked away from her, and she knew that she should have been getting back to work. She could see a family sitting down in another booth and pulling off their coats, no doubt preparing for a long meal with a low tip at the end. But, this was the most he had ever said in all the time he had been coming to the diner. She couldn’t just walk away now.
 
“Are you expecting him? I could get you—him—something or—”
 
“Oh no, that’s okay…This town was the last place I saw him is all, and he said he’d be back on a Sunday. Because it’s the holy day of the week, y’know, and he’d be okay then.” He gazed down into his half-empty cup and bit his lower lip. For a moment, she just watched him. She had never seen anyone so worn before, and his words confused her, but then he said, “I’m sorry, I didn’t mean—” He lifted his eyes, glancing past her to where another group of customers was entering. “You should get back to work.”
 
She nodded and started to walk away, then stopped and went back to him. “I hope he—your brother—I hope he’s okay.”
 
He smiled again, that forlorn and tight-lipped smile, and said, “Me too.”
 
He didn’t come back the next Sunday. Or the one after. She didn’t see him for two more months, and she assumed that he finally found his brother again. After all, she had seen enough customers come and go. Even a regular stopped being regular after a certain point. He wasn’t any different. Well. Not really.
 
Then one morning as she was wiping off a table following the early morning rush, she heard a familiar voice say, “I’ll take that extra cup of coffee now.”
 
She turned around, dirty rag still in her chapped hands, and he was standing there with a man next to him. The sun slanting through the window beside her made her squint as she looked at them. Next to her one regular coffee with an extra cup customer, the other man was taller with dark hair falling in his eyes. She tried not to stare at the oddly formed burn marks on his forearms and hands. Like destroyed circles with slashes through them. Like alien crop circles on the skin. The tall man noticed her watching, and he shoved his hands in his pockets self-consciously.
 
But, him, her regular customer, he appeared happier than before, so the burn marks on what she assumed was his brother’s arms must not have been that big of a deal. There was a spark in his eyes instead of that misty haze he always had when he used to stare at the parking lot for those endless mornings.
 
“It’s not Sunday,” she said after she had returned with two cups and a pot of coffee, and they had sat down.
 
“No, it’s not,” he noted.
 
“I thought you said he’d only be back on a Sunday. Because it was holy?”
 
“Yeah, well,” he replied, taking the mug from her after she had filled it, “he decided to come back anyway. I don’t think he has to worry about holy days anymore though.” He exchanged a private smile with his brother. His brother just blushed and looked down at the table where he was twisting his hands nervously, one over burned other.
 
“Well,” she said, “that’s good to hear. Now, you just let me know if there’s anything else I can get you.”
 
But the two brothers were already talking. Their conversation was easy and free. Happy.
 
Behind the counter, she set the coffee pot back on the burner and sighed before pulling out the can of coffee grounds and measuring out a scoopful for a fresh pot. She had a feeling the brothers would be there a while.
 
“He came back,” one of her coworkers remarked as she loaded plates of scrambled eggs and sausage links onto her tray. Hot and wispy steam rolled off the food and into the air. It smelled good and reminded her of her hunger.
 
 “No,” she replied, “his brother came back. That’s who should’ve been here the whole time.”
 
“He was the empty cup, then?” the lady asked before she headed out to the main floor with her tray.
 
“Yeah,” she said, smiling to herself and watching the two men by the window under the morning sunlight, “he was the empty cup.”
 
 
End

Date: 2007-03-01 01:37 am (UTC)
theladyscribe: Etta Place and Butch Cassidy laughing. (jensen ackles)
From: [personal profile] theladyscribe
Oh, boys.

Normally, he stared at the table when he came in and mumbled his order to his feet.

Oh, Dean. You know it's bad when he doesn't even look at the waitress as he orders.

This was lovely!

Date: 2007-03-01 08:12 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] pixel-0.livejournal.com
Oh, it definitely is bad when Dean doesn't even try to flirt with the waitress! Poor guy. Thank you for reading! :)

Date: 2007-03-01 02:20 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] iamstealthyone.livejournal.com
I really like this. :) The OCs voice/characterization works well, and you did a great job showing how lonely and yearning Dean is as he waits for Sam. Dean always ordering that extra cup of coffee just broke my heart, and made Sam's appearance at the end such a sweet moment. :)

Date: 2007-03-01 08:13 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] pixel-0.livejournal.com
I'm so glad you liked the end with Sam coming back. I wanted to actually give people a happy ending for once, and Dean does deserve it, too. Thank you very much! :)

Date: 2007-03-01 02:53 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] albeitslowly.livejournal.com
Oy! I should definitely not try to read fic after twelve hours in the factory. I agree with the first two comments here, Dean's longing and apparent lack of direction and motivation without Sam there to give him purpose were very well done.

I'm sure there's more to it, though, and for the life of me, I can't figure out what it is. LOL. It almost sounds as though Sam had gone dark side and left Dean, probably to protect him, and promised that he'd come back on a Sunday so that Dean would know, by him coming on a holy day that he was himself again.

But then, Sam being away from Dean was probably as hard on him as any danger Dark!Sam might've brought, so it was either save Dean by staying away or save Dean by coming back, whether he was sure he was okay or not. So, Sam did something, maybe made a deal or performed some kind of ritual, so that he could go back to Dean, be with him, but not be able to hurt him? Hahahahaha, OH GOD, I think I totally slaughtered that, but I've had a miserable day, and my brain is fried.

Do I get points for trying?

Wonderful job, my dear.

Tracy

Date: 2007-03-01 08:16 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] pixel-0.livejournal.com
Oh sweetie! Twelve hours!

There is more to the fic, yes, but it depends on how you look at it. I had two people read it over and while they both saw what I wanted, they both had a bit of a different perspective on it. I know it's not canon at all, but I liked the idea of Sunday being a day that Sam, when he was possessed, would be able to come back to Dean without the demon controlling him. Like I said, it's not canon, so of course, it's one of those things that I just took too much creative liberty with.

And of course you get points for trying. *gold star sticker*

Thank you! :)

Date: 2007-03-02 01:48 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] albeitslowly.livejournal.com
LOL, yeah that works about the Sundays, too. The thing I had trouble with was the way Dean was just waiting for him to come back, and the way Sam told him he'd be back. I couldn't figure out why Dean would just be waiting and not out looking for Sam. Ooh, but were the burns like a binding for the demon that possessed Sam, or like a protection spell against it? I knew they had to be something like that, but I couldn't decide which exactly.

My friend and I were actually discussing this story, and we both got that Sam was possessed, but I thought Sam just found a way to come back, based on what Dean said about the "he decided to come back anyway," and she thought Dean went and got him.

Didn't know you could make us think when we're both bone tired, didja? Loved this story, darlin.

Tracy

Date: 2007-03-02 02:39 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] pixel-0.livejournal.com
See, the funny thing I'm learning about this story is because the character (waitress) knows so little, there's really a lot of interpretations that will work. I thought I had a pretty straightforward plot, but I'm seeing that everybody has their own perspective and each perspective works, too!

Yep, the burns on Sam's arms were the binding marks that he had from "Born Under a Bad Sign." That's the main reason I put a spoiler warning for that episode on here.

Here's my take on what happened: Sam got possessed. While possessed, was able to "snap out of it" for a moment to tell Dean that he could come back on Sundays. He then went missing. Dean came to the diner because, hey, he likes his coffee. When Dean left himself for those few months, he finally got a lead on Sam. He went to find Sam, was able to exorcise him, and he returned. The whole "he decided to come back anyway" was a bit of Dean being a smartass to Sam that he was able to finally get the demon out of him. But, again, that's just me. It's not necessarily the right or wrong interpretation of the story as there are a lot of blank spots and "creative liberties" (heh) taken here.

Hee. I'm actually a little bit flattered that you guys talked about the story. (I'm a dork, I know...) :)

Date: 2007-03-02 02:58 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] albeitslowly.livejournal.com
Well, there are two things IM is good for: talking about Supernatural and talking about Supernatural fics. I swear, that's all we do, and we definitely need a twelve step program. But it's hard to wean ourselves from it when people keep posting things like this that just make us think. Our brains don't work separately anymore, I don't think.

As far as creative liberty goes, I consider myself the queen of that myself. No apologies for actually being creative. (It's stupidity I have a problem with) Not that I've ever read any stupid fic, LOL.

You never disappoint. Thanks.

Tracy

Date: 2007-03-01 03:29 am (UTC)
tabaqui: (s&dlisten)
From: [personal profile] tabaqui
Ah, neat. That's a sad little ficlet with a lovely, happy ending. I like seeing the boys from the outside. Nice, nice stuff!

Date: 2007-03-01 08:17 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] pixel-0.livejournal.com
Thank you very much! :)

Date: 2007-03-01 03:57 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] dolimir-k.livejournal.com
What a wonderful story. You actually choked me up here at the end!!

Date: 2007-03-01 08:18 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] pixel-0.livejournal.com
Oh, I was actually trying to write something with a happy ending for once! The angst just seems to follow me around, I guess. Thank you very much for reading! :)

Date: 2007-03-01 04:00 am (UTC)
embroiderama: (Dean - breaking)
From: [personal profile] embroiderama
Oh, wow. The image of Dean, withdrawn like that and keeping an extra cup for Sam--it hurts, but in a good way.

Date: 2007-03-01 08:19 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] pixel-0.livejournal.com
Thank you very much! :)

Date: 2007-03-01 04:34 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] ellipsisblack.livejournal.com
Oh, you almost had me crying.

I love how you tell it from the waitress' POV, who knows nothing about Dean (not even his name) in small scenes, mundane and simle. But you show glimpses of so much more. I really liked this.

Date: 2007-03-01 08:20 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] pixel-0.livejournal.com
And here I was trying to avoid making people cry. Someday, I will write a fic that I don't make people cry. *facepalm* Just apparently not today.

Thank you very much for reading! :)

Date: 2007-03-01 05:26 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] alias_chick.livejournal.com
Ooo!! Lovely job! Loved your description of Dean, and it's cool to see it from this POV!

Date: 2007-03-01 08:20 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] pixel-0.livejournal.com
Thank you very much! :)

Date: 2007-03-01 05:30 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] somersaulter.livejournal.com
A lovely piece. It's nice to see things in another's POV.

Date: 2007-03-01 08:21 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] pixel-0.livejournal.com
Thank you! I'm glad you liked this different perspective! :)

Date: 2007-03-01 08:39 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] jukeboxxed.livejournal.com
aww, dean waiting for sammy :)
great job!

Date: 2007-03-01 08:21 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] pixel-0.livejournal.com
Thank you for reading! :)

Date: 2007-03-01 09:54 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] ihearthings-ii.livejournal.com
oh this was lovely. and Dean, just waiting.

Date: 2007-03-01 08:22 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] pixel-0.livejournal.com
Thank you very much! I'm glad you liked it! :)

Date: 2007-03-01 08:40 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] ihearthings-ii.livejournal.com
I did! and you're welcome.

Date: 2007-03-01 06:03 pm (UTC)
tigriswolf: (brothers)
From: [personal profile] tigriswolf
Oh, I like this. Well done.

Date: 2007-03-01 08:22 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] pixel-0.livejournal.com
Thank you very much! I'm glad you enjoyed it. :)

Date: 2007-03-01 09:08 pm (UTC)
mellaithwen: (Default)
From: [personal profile] mellaithwen
LJ being a dickhead agaaain.

or I didn't see it, which is worse.

Well, even though you know I loved it, I am saying it again. I love that Dean kept a place for Sam, and kept coming back, and then finally came back with Sam in tow. I love the outside pov too, seldom seen but wonderfully written!


Date: 2007-03-02 02:34 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] pixel-0.livejournal.com
Well, yes, LJ has that tendency. I think it's just got eternal PMS. *offers LJ chocolate to make it feel better*

I'm discovering I like the outsider POV more and more. I've been playing around with it a bit on the side, and it's just...it's different. I feel like I've tried everything else, so why not?

Thank you for your compliments! Also, of course, thank you so much for reading this over. I appreciate it so much. :D

Date: 2007-03-02 11:46 am (UTC)
mellaithwen: (Default)
From: [personal profile] mellaithwen
*sneaks chocolate for self when it isn't looking*

definately, I'm tempted to have a go at a DA/SPN outside one :D

no problem, hun! happy to help

Date: 2007-03-01 10:48 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] bbrownsugar.livejournal.com
Lovely. Just perfect.

Date: 2007-03-02 02:34 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] pixel-0.livejournal.com
Thank you very much! :)

Date: 2007-03-02 05:53 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] girlguidejones.livejournal.com
Love this! Especially the end, when the waitress talks to our narrator...

"“He was the empty cup, then?” the lady asked before she headed out to the main floor with her tray.

“Yeah,” she said, smiling to herself and watching the two men by the window under the morning sunlight, “he was the empty cup.”

I'm guessing you might have waited tables at some point in your life...because those of us in the biz generally name customers we don't know according to their dining habits. Therefore, Sam=The Empty Cup.

Well done!

Date: 2007-03-03 08:51 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] pixel-0.livejournal.com
Yup, I have done the waitressing bit, and it is so true that we just call the customer by their food. "Hey, large black coffee's walking in!" I find it both interesting and weird that we can know so much about a person except the very simple thing of their name. I've had customers tell me about their medical problems before and yet I still don't know who they really are.

Okay, sorry, I got to rambling there. But, thank you very much for your feedback! I'm so glad that you enjoyed it! :)

Date: 2007-03-03 07:19 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] iamzulma.livejournal.com
aww, pixel! dean waiting at a diner every sunday for sam to return? *sniffle* LOVE the outsider pov here, how curious she is about dean. and the end? was the perfect touch: "he was the empty cup." *SIGH*

i continue to be in AWE of your writing. DAMN, girl! :))

Date: 2007-03-03 09:05 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] pixel-0.livejournal.com
Oh, I must share! When I was writing this, I actually thought of you a lot. (I know, that must sound creepy-stalkerish, but I have a good reason.) Do you remember that coffee fic prompt I wrote you about last summer or so? (If not, I can find it.) So, apparently, thinking of coffee and the Winchesters, makes me think of you. :)

I'm really enjoying the outsider POV, too. I've been playing around with a few more different ones, but I also have this other monstrous story I'm working on as well. *sigh* I need, like, five more hours in my day to make me happy. :P

Thank you so much for the lovely comment! You always make me smile! :D

Date: 2007-03-03 10:07 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] iamzulma.livejournal.com
aww, pixel, you're my STALKER? ;) i wouldn't mind that at all, heee! and yes, of course i remember that coffee fic-- it was unforgettable, just like the rest of your fics! :) i'm touched that coffee and winchesters make you think of me! that makes me giddily happy like you wouldn't believe. *hugs*

i'm really glad that you're still writing in the fandom. i hope you know that your work hasn't gone unnoticed. there's a lovememe going around (not sure if you know about it, but just in case), and your name is on it! here's the link:

http://musesfool.livejournal.com/1315029.html?thread=24475093#t24475093

and sweetie, YOU make ME smile! always.



Date: 2007-03-04 10:08 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] pixel-0.livejournal.com
Oh, the love meme...[livejournal.com profile] drvsilla had pointed it out to me before you did, so I had seen it, but really? I wasn't sure just how to react to it.

Well, here's (http://pixel-0.livejournal.com/43375.html) me babbling about all of that so you don't have to read the same thing twice. :)

*hugs back*

Date: 2007-03-12 07:50 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] a-phoenixdragon.livejournal.com
This...was beautiful, honey.

Sad, haunting and yet hopeful and filled with joy! Thanks for sharing this with us!

*Hugs you tightly*

Date: 2007-03-15 09:31 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] pixel-0.livejournal.com
Thank you so much for the feedback! I'm so glad to hear that you enjoyed it (and that you found the happiness in it too...I tried so hard for a happy ending). :)

Date: 2007-04-04 06:21 am (UTC)
lark_ascends: Blue and purple dragonfly, green background (Default)
From: [personal profile] lark_ascends
Nicely written.

Date: 2007-04-05 01:25 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] pixel-0.livejournal.com
Thank you! :)

Date: 2011-06-21 03:53 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] darkestnight12.livejournal.com
Oh, so touching!

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